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Offline mr_vue

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« on: February 28, 2011, 11:25:27 PM »
Well, I'm not much into poetry or spoken word, but I came up with this.  Give it a read and let me know what you think.  I'm not even sure what this would be classified as.  This had been on my mind for awhile now, so I thought I'd let it out tonight.  My apologies for the length and bad poetic skills (i have none)

 

Dumb

 

I will never be like my parents

My parents are so dumb

 

they brought me up in a world

without knowing the language

the culture, the customs

who were they to tell me i was doing wrong when

all i did was right by the rest of society?

my parents are so dumb

 

My parents are so dumb

i've been the middle man in this ring of money, durgs, and politics we call welfare since the 2nd grade

i've been their right hand man for all their fights

i've negotiated all our needs with my broken ass 1st grade english skills

my parents are so dumb

 

my parents are so dumb

education?  what education?

job?  what job?

reputation?  what reputation?

image?  what image?

my parents are so dumb

 

i'm ashamed to tell people my parents have no job

i go to help with the garden to be a good

son........... .....

i murder a town of would be cash

my dumb mom just laughs it off

my dumb dad just watches

my dumbass gets frustrated and quits

and then i listen and watch......... ..........

 

i don't hear a thing, but i watch as the crops

scream to be saved from the "smart educated son"

 

cries of weeping crops call their names

begging to berathe from all the carnivorous weeds

voices from desert dried throats reach out for their hands........

 

my dumb mom softly caresses the weeping crops to the side and

takes out the weeds

like a swift ninja with a swipe of her hmong knife

 

my dumb dad comes over with a life saving pail of god given water and

quenches the thirst of the dehydrated crops

 

with 2 kindergarten moves they've brought back

the life of their heart and soul

 

my ears stand straight up like an owl and listen

 

my mom sweetly serenades the silky air with a

sonata from a language long forgotten

my dad in the distance distinctly replies with a brilliant baritone rebuttal

 

out in the scorching sun they go at it nursing back

to life their crops while orchestrating a symphony

with their sweet choruses

 

my cowardness leads me to hide in the comfort of

the garden house my parents built

 

i listen to their souls as they sing.......

 

my parents are so brave to give up their lives and

invest in mine

like a rising stock account the risks would be worh

the rewards even if they don't reap the benefits

they kicked the shit out of me for me to become a good

citizen even if i wasn't a good son

my parents are so brave

 

my parents are so resilient

they survived on $400 a month to feed the mouths

of 9 spoiled kids and i'm complaining about

a $60 phone bill?

my parents are full of knowledge and wisdom

education they don't have but guidance, morals, and

values are irreplaceable

shortcuts never taken

everything earned

my parents are so resourceful

 

my parents are well respected

my dad has married countless couples

my mom has healed a many souls and called home many spirits

 

i will never be like my parents

i am so dumb.




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Re: dumb
« Reply #1 on: February 28, 2011, 11:44:40 PM »
goosebumps.

love it.
great work.



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xoniuqe

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Re: dumb
« Reply #2 on: March 06, 2011, 03:23:02 PM »
OMG! I haven't read anything this good in a while. Thank YOU for sharing!  O0 O0 O0

You ARE so right. We used to call our parents dumb, but as I hope every child who grew older, took those many naive statements back and realized how brilliant our simple parents were.



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Re: dumb
« Reply #3 on: March 16, 2011, 10:12:12 AM »
WOW!

It was long but so worthy! We are fortunate to have read something so stupendous!

I love how the poem climaxed and died down with much realization! Bravo!



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Re: dumb
« Reply #4 on: March 19, 2011, 10:58:02 AM »
This was quite dumb.  But I enjoyed it thoroughly.  O0



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evil-in-deed

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Re: dumb
« Reply #5 on: April 29, 2011, 01:32:11 AM »
good poem...



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Json

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« Reply #6 on: May 08, 2011, 08:50:47 PM »
 O0



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foromosa

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Re: dumb
« Reply #7 on: May 16, 2011, 09:23:50 PM »
 O0



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Gemini

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Re: dumb
« Reply #8 on: August 25, 2011, 01:14:26 AM »
that was deep.  O0



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