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Yawg_hlob

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poetry
« on: March 13, 2016, 06:04:41 AM »
I'd like to share some of my poetry give me feed back of what u guys thing.

From afar ill watch you live your life...
pretending I'm ok ill hide my feelings inside...
 put on a smile as if I'm alright...
 locked away is my heart.. i once gave to you...
 now its torn apart...
 locked in chains never again opening its doors...
 set in stone my heart beats no more...


Hopeless dreams of an empty vessel...
Lifeless soul wondering upon this earth...
Without the beating of a heart i wish to be at ease...
Lay me down to dream an eternity of happiness...
True love is pain while loneliness is tormenting...
Give me the strength to end this insanity...
End this fate of a lonely heart...
There will be no more tears... no more breath... i leave it all in the past...
Where i go do not follow... the road i lead splits in to...
Which do i chose...
A road of pain or a road to be free from worldly beings...
My mind is made and before i go i say this to you... with my last breath i will always love you...
Till we meet again...
In the next life I'll remember not to lose you...








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Yawg_hlob

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Re: poetry
« Reply #1 on: March 13, 2016, 08:39:25 AM »
Thanks 😊



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proudlao

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Re: poetry
« Reply #2 on: March 13, 2016, 09:12:36 AM »
Very well expressed. The writing itself could be condense. Less is more when you use the proper terms. Overall, it's a good piece.



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