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Creative Corner => Poetic Souls => Topic started by: yubnag on March 05, 2013, 02:39:42 PM
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A Waiting Story
He smiles like a summer show
His words flow,
Crossing whispering windows,
Humming a tune of rue
He charges in willowing charm
A highlight,
Love takes flight
In the calm of life
Beauty beholds upon his heart
So innocent like the safety in his arm
I am undeniably captivated
Yet unbelievably liberated
If we are a song no one heard
then we live in the words
If you are just a daydream I yearn to hold
Then we are a story waiting to be told
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Titles are difficult..... ... but it's such a personal thing, I don't think I could do any justice by helping choose a title.
Excellent poem though.. great job. :)
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Titles are difficult..... ... but it's such a personal thing, I don't think I could do any justice by helping choose a title.
Excellent poem though.. great job. :)
Thank you! I'm open to any suggestion! :)
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Thank you! I'm open to any suggestion! :)
ahhh okay.. here are the titles that came to mind when I read your poem:
1. You can do the usual and use the first line of your poem as the title, and then have the title dip right into the poem, like this:
He Smiles Like a Summer Show
His words fly,
Crossing whispering windows,
Humming a tune of rue...
2. Other titles I thought of were:
Like a Summer Show
A Waiting Story
Love Takes Flight
As you can see, these are all lines taken verbatim from your poem. ;D
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ahhh okay.. here are the titles that came to mind when I read your poem:
1. You can do the usual and use the first line of your poem as the title, and then have the title dip right into the poem, like this:
He Smiles Like a Summer Show
His words fly,
Crossing whispering windows,
Humming a tune of rue...
2. Other titles I thought of were:
Like a Summer Show
A Waiting Story
Love Takes Flight
As you can see, these are all lines taken verbatim from your poem. ;D
Thanks! I love "A Waiting Story"! Thanks very much!
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Yubnag I love it!! Thanks for contributing. O0
Yubnag I love it!! Thanks for contributing. O0
Thank you!!!
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Nice, I would prefer the title to be "our words"
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Nice, I would prefer the title to be "our words"
That's also a great title proudlao! Thanks!
And like violet had mention, a title to a poem may be very personal, hence, "A Waiting Story". :)
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Keep sharing :)